Bees that buzz and cats that purr
and tiny little hummingbirds
apparently forgot the words
to their respective songs.
Bees drone on as if demented
cats purr to show that they’re contented
hummingbirds hum without relenting
as they fly along.
I wonder what they all would say
if words replaced the noises they
generally make all day
instead of mantra mumblings.
I imagine that the bees
would sound much like Yosemite
Sam, in low obscenities,
growling and grumbling.
The cat, I’m seriously willing to bet,
would chant the language of Tibet,
his Zen-like trance enticing pets
from humans passing by.
And, finally, the little hummer
whose wings beat like a manic drummer
would complain that it’s a bummer
to work so hard to fly.
Might it sound slightly better as ‘Bees that buzz’? to avoid the repetition of the word ‘hum’ in the two consecutive lines (as applied to two different creatures)? Apologies for sticking my oar in, I wouldn’t dream of telling you how to write your poetry! It’s just that, from a reader’s perspective that repetition struck me immediately.
Good catch, Tony! Believe it or not, the original handwritten said ‘buzz’!! Thanks for being my editor! lol. I’m changin’ it boss! 😉
I’m pleased to see that you’ve remedied this matter Ms Studley – any more actions of rogue behaviour on your part and you’ll have to buzz off!