Linda Studley

Can't Put the Pen Down…

Phoenix Without Fire – Re-write


I will dream it first,

deathless reincarnation,

not me, but still me.

 

I will shed my skin

wiggle, slip, kick, and it’s gone

as I slide away.

 

I will rise again,

stretch newly fledged wings, and fly.

Phoenix without fire.

 

I took the original poem “Phoenix Without Fire” to our writing group and received some very helpful suggestions. The most obvious was that if it was ‘without fire’ where did the ‘ash’ in the last stanza come from. Lol.

I’ve done a rewrite incorporating this input (you’ll see the first and second stanza have traded places too). I think it’s really important to our growth as writers to be open to constructive suggestions offered by people we trust (that’s my writing group 🙂 )

 

Single Post Navigation

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s

%d bloggers like this: