Breathing Free
The best things in life are fleeting;
the savour of a home grown melon, dripping sweetness,
the caress of a soft chinook wind on a winter cold face,
the oriole’s song vibrating down the ravine,
the prismatic gems on a raindrop studded lawn,
the good earth breathing humus into the dusk.
The best things in life are fleeting and worthy
of remembrance so that in dark moments
we may close our eyes, hold them close,
and breathe free again.
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Lovely! I like the repeated use of the word ‘close’ (different pronunciations & different meanings) in the penultimate line. At first I thought the 2nd ‘close’ was a misprint and should have read ‘closed’, relating to the eyes. then I realised it related to the memories of the best things in life and ‘hold them close’ is of course exactly right. Lovely descriptive imagery and word-use.
Would you like to be my publicist 😉 lol.Thanks for the kind words Tony. I appreciate getting detailed feedback – it’s what makes us better writers!
My fees are very reasonable! 🙂
They’d have to be. Lol!